Talk:Your Majesty (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Good Article
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Reviewing this one shortly after its nomination! --K. Peake 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • Infobox looks good
  • Remove wikilink on studio album
  • "of their debut album" → "of their debut studio album,"
  • "They recorded their next album in" → "They later recorded the album in" since the later date makes it obvious this is about Your Majesty
  • Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
  • Wikilink tempos
  • "it was compared with" → "comparisons were made to"
  • "the New Pornographers and the Kinks," → "the New Pornographers, and the Kinks,"
  • "up to the album's release," → "up to the release of it"
  • "Your Majesty was promoted with" → "The album was promoted with"
  • "and two headlining tours." → "and two headlining tours by the band."
  • Critical reception sentence should open the third para instead of commercial one
  • "Your Majesty charted on two" → "In the US, the album charted on two"
  • "charts, peaking at number 15 on the
    Heatseekers Albums
    charts, respectively."
  • "The album received a mixed-to-positive reaction" → "Your Majesty received generally positive reviews"

Background and production

  • "of independent label" → "of independent record label" with the wikilink
  • Target acoustic to Acoustic music
  • Wikilink electric piano
  • "September and October that year," → "September and October of 2000,"
  • "They spent the period" → "They spent the period after Christmas"
  • "February and March 2001." → "February and March of 2001."
  • "to recording their next album," → "to recording the album,"
  • "did pre-production with" → "worked on pre-production with"
  • "they went over" → "the Anniversary went over"
  • Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
  • "and brainstorming sessions." → "and frequent brainstorming."
  • "in their hometown" → "in their hometown of"
  • "acted as producer and" → "acted as producer for the album and"
  • "they were assisted" → "the recording was assisted"
  • "The band spent some" → "The Anniversary spent some"
  • Target Malibu Beach to Malibu, California

Composition

  • Retitle to Composition and lyrics
  • Do the order of Berwanger and Roelofs need to be mentioned since it is the two same people; why not just mention they wrote all of the tracks?
  • "the album also includes" → "it also includes"
  • "been classified as emo" → "been classified as emo,"
  • "than the band's debut album with" → "than Designing a Nervous Breakdown, with"
  • Target rock to Rock music
  • "
    MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "Pope switched from" → "For the album, Pope switched from"
  • "upbeat energy of the band's first album." → "
    MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Wikilink
    up-tempo
    per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Target pop to Pop music
  • "of the Anniversary's debut album." → "of Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
  • "is love song that is" → "is a love song that is" with the wikilink
  • "that has an instrumental ending segueing" → "with an instrumental ending that segues"
  • "playing guitars in" → "playing guitars for the track in"
  • "are progressive-rock-indebted" → "are progressive rock-indebted"
  • "with "The Death of the King" evokes the sound" → ""The Death of the King" evokes the sound"
  • [16][14] should be put in numerical order

Release

  • Retitle to Release and promotion
  • "On September 3, the album's track listing" → "On September 3 of that year, the track listing for Your Majesty"
  • "On September 24," → "Later that month,"
  • "In October and November 2001, the band" → "In October and November of 2001, the Anniversary"
  • "in February," → "in the following month,"
  • "in March and April." → "in March and April of 2002."
  • "In October and November, they went" → "In October and November of that year, the band went"
  • "On November 19, Vagrant" → "On November 19, 2002, Vagrant"
  • "video compilation titled" → "video compilation entitled"
  • Wikilink music video
  • Remove wikilink on Rich Egan
  • "on the label's" → "on the record label's"
  • Target message board to Internet forum
  • "followed this up," → "followed the deletion up,"
  • "said the label and the band" → "said Vagrant and the Anniversary"
  • "the label had" → "the record label admittedly had"
  • "replied Vagrant had no" → "replied Vagrant should have had no"
  • "out-sold the band's debut." → "out-sold Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
  • "In March and April," → "In March and April of 2003,"
  • "In October and November," → "In October and November of that year,"
  • "Carrier and Apollo Sunshine supported the second." → "the second was supported by Carrier and Apollo Sunshine."
  • "the band broke up." → "the Anniversary broke up."

Reception

  • "received generally favorable reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
  • The reviews should start in a second para after the Metacritic sentence
  • "Steve Servos said;" → "Steve Servos said,"
  • "to those on the band's debut album." → "to the ones on Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
  • "
    E! Online
     said Your Majesty"
  • "that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the record" → "opining that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the album"
  • "keyboard from the band's debut," → "keyboard from Designing a Nervous Breakdown,"
  • "and that the tracks are" → "and the tracks are"
  • "said Rob Schnapf's and Doug Boehm's work" → "said Schnapf's and Boehm's work"
  • "Berwanger and Roelofs." → "Berwanger and Roelofs on the album."
  • "found the band lacking in" → "found the Anniversary to be lacking in"
  • "but it failed to do so" → "but had failed to do so"
  • "Your Majesty reached number 15" → "Commercially, Your Majesty reached number 15"

Track listing

  • Top should mention all songs were written by Justin Roelofs and Josh Berwanger, since they do not need to be ordered differently each time

Personnel

Charts

  • Good

References

  • Copyvio score looks very good at 18.0%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Fix
    MOS:QWQ
    issues with refs 21 and 35
  • Cite Billboard as magazine for refs 38 and 39, though only target to Billboard (magazine) on ref 38

Final comments and verdict

  •  On hold and I have noticed your skills as an editor have improved since when I started doing reviews of your articles a while back, well done! --K. Peake 11:30, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done.
talk) 11:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply
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Yeepsi Quick response was nice to see, though there were a few remaining issues that I fixed with brief copyediting. ✓ Pass now, as is well deserved! --K. Peake 12:21, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply
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