Template:Did you know nominations/Crippled

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 23:45, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Crippled

• ... that in Crippled, author Frances Ryan speaks to a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating by 2013 and her specialist meals by 2017 due to the government's austerity programme? Source: Crippled (p.11-13): "I first spoke to Susan in the autumn of 2013, just after the first round of austerity measures came into force ... She could not afford to put her heating on and had stopped using her oven ... in the summer of 2017 ... She stopped going out socially, 'even to the pictures': she can't afford the taxi fare there ... she can rarely afford food. Her bowel condition means she can't safely eat solids or absorb vitamins naturally and needs specialist meals ... Two years ago, she stopped buying it completely ... Instead, she lives off cereal"
  • Reviewed: Knowles Mill

Created by Bilorv (talk). Self-nominated at 12:49, 31 July 2022 (UTC).

• Comment only. NOT a review Is this fact or fiction or reportage? If its all fiction/opinion presented as such then a plot summary/Synopsis doesnt need references. If it is presented as fact then it needs references IMO.... and there are very few. If it says "someone died because the money wasn't enough" then we need a 3rd party ref of that or it needs to be presented as "Frances Ryan said that she was told that X died because ... although the coroner said .... ". Victuallers (talk) 15:12, 2 August 2022 (UTC)

  I don't really understand what this means. There are three types of information in this non-fiction book: statistical information with citations within the book; investigative reporting based on interviewing disabled people in their houses over periods of several years (to see their living conditions firsthand); and derivative reporting based on local news coverage. For instance, in the "Work" chapter, the two deaths due to Jobseeker's Allowance removal are supported by local and national news coverage, coroner's reports and family testimony. As a journalist with a PhD in the field employed directly by a

  WP:DYKCRIT#3(b) due to dispute over this in past DYK hooks of mine. — Bilorv (talk

  ) 17:55, 2 August 2022 (UTC)

Overall: I'll start this off by saying that this is the third DYK I've reviewed so please let me know if something I say is inaccurate or atypical. The article is well-sourced except for much of the synopsis, and it is my understanding that such sections are usually not sourced so I didn't mark that is an issue. I do have comment about the hook itself, I think it might help to include the year the austerity programme began affecting the woman mentioned to give context? I know the hook ia at 190 characters so we can't really add much of anything to it but I wanted to see what you thought about possibly adding that context? Also I assume the quote "can rarely afford ford" is a typo and is supposed to say food (though that's not in the article and ultimately doesn't matter, I'm just assuming it means food and if it means something else that changes the context let me know). Also as an aside this is an interesting article and I read the whole thing, it's well-written and I didn't even set out to read it front to bottom but just to skim it, but I got caught up in finding out all the details and read it all, so I think others finding it via DYK would feel the same. - Aoidh (talk) 23:10, 12 August 2022 (UTC)

• ALT1: ... that in Crippled, author Frances Ryan speaks to a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating by 2013 and her specialist meals by 2017 due to an austerity programme beginning in 2010?

Thanks for the review, Aoidh, and I'm glad you liked the article! "Food" was indeed a typo. How does this tweaked version, ALT1, look? (It's fairly uncontroversial to say that the programme began in 2010—when you might say it began "affecting" Susan is not so clear, nor if/when the programme ended.) — Bilorv (talk) 08:27, 13 August 2022 (UTC)

The United Kingdom government austerity programme article linked in the hook does support the 2010 year, and ALT1 looks good to go. - Aoidh (talk) 09:34, 13 August 2022 (UTC)

Some concerns: a person is not usually mentioned in a hook unless they have an article. Also, the hook is a run-on sentence with a lot of information in it. I'm suggesting an ALT hook below:

• ALT1a ...that in Crippled, the author describes a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating or her specialist meals due to an austerity programme?
• ALT1b ...that Crippled documents the struggles of a disabled woman who could not afford heating or her specialist meals due to an austerity programme?

@Bilorv and Aoidh: I see that Aoidh suggested adding in the year of the austerity programme, but I think the years are causing the hook to become conveluted. If a year is to be included, I would only date the 2010 austerity programme, but austerity can be argued to have begun in 2010 and continued (is continuing?) for several years, so having 2010 might be problematic. Thoughts? Z1720 (talk) 01:02, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

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WP:DYKSG. I would still prefer to include Ryan's name, unless you can give me a reason why we shouldn't mention it. I'm really struggling to find such a reason: she's not low-profile or mentioned in a negative context; her relationship to the topic is explained; it's rather strange not to mention an author's name in a book hook; I had no issue with the mention of a non-notable author four months ago (with the hook approved and prepped by two of the most experienced DYK volunteers).

As for the years, I don't particularly mind, though I think 2010 should be included to date the hook: this isn't an event from the 1940s. I agree wholeheartedly that we should not get into the debate of when austerity ended (for reference: everyone would agree it lasted at least until 2015). This is why I sought to avoid precisely that with the phrasing "... beginning in 2010" (not contentious). We could also use "... that begun in 2010" or "that was introduced in 2010". I'm all ears for recommendations of more concise phrasing. — Bilorv (talk

) 08:12, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

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WP:DYKSG

, saying that if they are not notable enough to have an article then they shouldn't be named in the hook. As for the date, I'll suggest some ALT hooks below:

• ALT1c ... that in Crippled, the author describes a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating or her specialist meals due to the austerity programme that began in 2010?
• ALT1d ... that in Crippled, author Frances Ryan describes a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating or her specialist meals due to an austerity programme?

Thoughts? Different wording can also be proposed. Z1720 (talk) 14:00, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

I do like ALT1c, but I also want to see what Bilorv thinks. - Aoidh (talk) 14:18, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

(I just realised that I forgot to add the date to ALT1d, so let me propose yet another one...) Z1720 (talk) 14:21, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

ALT1e: ... that in Crippled, author Frances Ryan describes a disabled British woman who was unable to afford heating or her specialist meals due to an austerity programme that began in 2010?

I'm very happy with ALT1e and I think we can now bold/blue-link Frances Ryan per Valereee's brilliant work. Are you happy for this to be a double hook, Valereee? I believe that requires a review of the additional article (which Aoidh could do if interested) and one of us to do an extra QPQ. Apologies for the length this nomination is getting, but I think it's been worth spending the time. — Bilorv (talk) 20:57, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

Happy to have it bolded, if someone is interested in making that happen, and thanks for the kind words. I can donate Template:Did you know nominations/Stella Madzimbamuto. Valereee (talk) 21:07, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

I've just bolded Frances Ryan in ALT1e and added the article to the DYK nom page template and a DYKmake for it as well. Reviewer needed to review that article and also the newly doubled ALT1e hook, and to check the newly donated QPQ by Valereee. Thanks! BlueMoonset (talk) 22:05, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

For the Frances Ryan article itself Earwig shows no concern, the article is properly sourced, seems neutral, and I see no issues with it. ALT1e is good to go. (If some additional action is needed on my part let me know) - Aoidh (talk) 22:19, 17 August 2022 (UTC)