Template:Did you know nominations/Layal Abboud

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:15, 22 September 2017 (UTC)

Layal Abboud

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~~... that Layal Abboud, a Lebanese singer, has been titled as "Beauteous of Arab Songstresses" by 2016 Miss Arab World?~~ elfann.com
- ALT1:... that Layal Abboud (pictured) confirmed on Jun 15, 2017 she performed just one time plastic surgery, rhinoplasty, and her all body is natural? YouTube lbcgroup.tv/
- ALT2:... that Lebanese singer Layal Abboud worked as a police officer before becoming a pop star?

Created/expanded by Chyah (talk). Self-nominated at 00:30, 27 August 2017 (UTC).

Article is new enough, long enough, and within policy. I question the hooks, both of which remark on Abboud's appearance and pander to feminine beauty ideals. What's much more interesting is that she's both a humanitarian and an ex-cop. Put that into a hook and you've got a brilliant DYK. Morganfitzp (talk) 00:44, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

This article has numerous grammatical errors and needs a substantial copyedit. Example: "Stated that Akel Fakih [16] from 2014 [17] is who ' the mastermind behind the way' she dress in her professional, social, and daily life, 'Elie Samaan does my hair and makeup; my stylist is Serene Assaad, and my photographer is Hussein Salman.'" --Usernameunique (talk) 01:17, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

That too. I went at the lede. Chyah, would you like help with this? Morganfitzp (talk) 01:37, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

@Usernameunique: Okay, I did a grammatical overhaul and general clean-up. Some English-language sources are a bit dodgy, but there isn't much press on her in English. I'd have to give this an AGF pass, pending a new hook. Morganfitzp (talk) 04:32, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

Above and beyond, thanks Morganfitzp. --Usernameunique (talk) 04:35, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

@Morganfitzp: I appreciate your taking time for my first article on EnWiki, while i am active in Arabic and Persian projects. Most of sources about the person published in Arabic and focused on things liked by yellow press, i am searching for more better source that seems are not online, or it's archived. ސ ޚ ލ ٰ ا (talk) (talk) 09:06, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

Welcome Chyah! And thanks for sharing your knowledge with the English-speakers of the world. I added ALT2 above as a proposed hook. Morganfitzp (talk) 14:16, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

@Morganfitzp: this alt 2 is exactly what i wanted first to put it!

Alright then. Let's pass this! Morganfitzp (talk) 15:25, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral : Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: - Offline/paywalled citation accepted in good faith Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed : Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: None required.

Overall: This was the editor's first article in English. I helped a bit with grammar and general cleanup. Morganfitzp (talk) 15:25, 29 August 2017 (UTC)

@Chyah:: Saw your recent edits and I've worked on their grammar. See my notes on each edit for tips on editing in English. You may want to wait until this gets posted on the front page before making more edits. Morganfitzp (talk) 22:59, 29 August 2017 (UTC)