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Article evaluation
There are a lot of holes in this article. The Omega Point is an incredibly complex topic that spans into discussions of Theology, Quantum Physics, Cosmology, and even Politics. Pierre Teilhard de Chardin made an enormous impact throughout his dedication to the theory of world's apocalypse into the final remaining Omega. The conversation sparked enormous rivalry between Religion and Science, which even stirred the rooms of both Vatican Councils. The current article is written in verbiage that represents the writers personal research, or slight opinion, on what he has read and summarized to be the "Omega Point". I plan to rework the article to organize the available information within a variety of academic resources to outline the many corners of the theory. Most importantly Teilhard's Theory which is the capital definition of the concept. Beyond that, it is important to write about the exterior factors that the theory deeply affected through its controversial existence. Modern astrophysics defines a realm beyond this world that contains spiritual energy as Omega, but the point at which the world collapses into this energy of consciousness has been highly criticized as unscientific. This aspect is necessary to dissect throughout the following research.
Pierre Teilhard de Chardin's Theory
Etymology
"...if this book is to be properly understood, it must be read not as a work on metaphysics, still less as a sort of theological essay, but purely and a simply as a scientific treatise."[1]
Evolution
Evolution does not end with mankind: Earth's
Energy
Energy exists in two basic modes:
- Tangential: energy that can be measured by physics
- Radial: spiritual energy, this energy evolves into a higher state as time continues.
Teilhard misunderstood the
Formal Properties
- Teilhard's theory says humans will escape the Heat death of the universe. Scientifically, this means that intelligence cannot survive.[4] He theorizes that radial energy is non-compliant with entropy, it escapes the collapses of forces at world's end.
- The Omega Point does not exist within the timeline of the universe, it occurs at the exact edge of the end of time. From that point, all sequence of existence is sucked into its being.
- The Omega Point can be understood as a volume shaped as a cone in which each section taken from the base to its summit decreases until it diminishes into a final point.
- The volume described in the Third Property must be understood as an entity with finite boundaries. Teilhard explains:
"...what would have become of humanity, if, by some remote chance, it had been free to spread indefinitely on an unlimited surface, that is to say left only to the devices of its internal affinities? Something unimaginable.... Perhaps even nothing at all, when we think of the extreme important of the role played in its development by the forces of compression." [5]
Forces of Compression
Teilhard calls the contributing universal energy that generates the Omega Point "forces of compression", which unlike the scientific definition, does not include gravity or mass, but sources from communication and contact between human beings. This value is limitless and directly correlated with entropy. It suggests that as humans continue to interact, consciousness evolves and grows. For the theory to occur, humans must be bound to the finite earth. Creating a boundary forces the world's convergence upon itself which he theorizes to result in time ending in communion with the Omega Point-God. This portion of Teilhard's thinking shows his lack of expectation for humans to engage in space travel and transcend past the borders of the planet.[6]
Scientific Evaluation
John Gribbin, PhD, is an astrophysicist and author who writes to explore the scientific conversations behind human evolution, the origin of earth and mankind, and quantum physics. His book, The Omega Point is a "search for the missing mass and the ultimate fate of the universe" which references Pierre Teilhard de Chardin's Omega Point for an in depth scientific evaluation. The following data is compiled by Gribbin and sources from research conducted and published by the field's most relevant scientists. [7]
The Cosmological Density of Matter is denoted in astrophysics as the capital Greek Omega, Ω.
As long as the value of Ω is less than the value of 1, the universe will continue to expand infinitely through time.
If the value of the Ω eventually becomes greater than the value of 1, the universe is expected to experience a phenomenon known as
The two sides of the universe's fate are calculated from the equation of creation, specifically
Teilhard states,
"Spacetime...must somewhere ahead become involuted to a point which we might call Omega, which fuses and consumes [everything] integrally in itself." [11]
All
Davies' explaination of the entropic universe in the arrow of time:
The remaining history of the universe is the subsequent attempt to unwind by gravitational clumping and nucleosynthesis.
galaxies → stars → black holes
hydrogen → helium → iron
Together these two evolutionary chains account for all the observed macroscopic time asymmetry in the world, and imprint upon our environment a distinct arrow of time.[14]
Stephen Hawking's description of the cosmogenesis requires inflation as an element in the evaluation, producing a theoretical model for how a universe could be created out of nothing. This moment exists before the inflation era in which the Universe must be closed, and its Omega slightly above 1.
The Ultimate Fate of the Universe
"This will be the end and the fulfillment of the spirit of the Earth. The end of the world: the wholesale internal introversion upon itself of the nooshpere, which has simultaneously reach the uttermost limit of its complexity and centrality. The end of the world: the overthrow of equilibrium [the Heat Death], detaching the mind, fulfilled at last, from it material matrix, so that it will henceforth rest with all its weigh on God-Omega." [15]
Theological Controversy
Pierre Teilhard de Chardin's life from 1881-1955 falls directly in between
In Vatican I, 1870,
"If such a doctrine were to be spread, what will become of the unchangeable Catholic dogmas, what of the unity and the stability of the Creed?"[17]
Teilhard's theory was a personal attempt in creating a new
Teilhard reaffirms the role of the Church in a letter to Auguste Valensin:
"I believe in the Church, mediatrix between God and the world[.] … The Church, the reflectively christified portion of the world, the Church, the principal focus of inter-human affinities through super-charity, the Church, the central axis of universal convergence and the precise point of contact between the universe and Omega Point. … The Catholic Church, however, must not simply seek to affirm its primacy and authority but quite simply to present the world with the Universal Christ, Christ in human-cosmic dimension, as animator of evolution."[19]
This statement describes a personal theological belief that contradicts traditional Catholic values as well as the story of creation portrayed by the Bible.
Peer Review
@Cacrotty: The topic you chose is extremely interesting and not something I have any prior knowledge on so I enjoyed reading your ideas as well as the original article. You analysis of each of these sources is very detailed and does a really good job of stating facts and information without any specific opinions or bias. I think this is really important, especially for a topic like yours which consists of a lot if ideas and opinions of strong-minded scientists and philosophers. In terms of what is written in your sandbox, how are you planning on incorporating it in the actual article? The layout you have currently I think is a little bit choppy and hard to follow. As you move from point to point I am having a bit of a hard time seeing the connection between them. I also noticed you have a lot of quotes so far. While these are really interesting and definitely help the reader understand the point of view of those involved in the Omega Point, it might be easier to read and make it a bit less choppy if you were to paraphrase some of the quotes. Obviously this can't be done for every quote but rewording a couple could help the flow of the article as a whole. I think you did a really good job breaking up the article into appropriate sections. The new section you added about the Roman Catholic Church does a really good job of tying in some aspects of the article that initially seemed unrelated. This section, that is not in the original article, brings together some interesting and seemingly important points about the Omega Point such as its blend of science and religion. Your sources seem reliable and you have a good variety which is beneficial in terms of preventing bias. My last suggestion for you would be to copy and paste parts of the original article into your sandbox an bold your additions to see how they may or may not work when combined together. This also helped me in terms of finding where key information was missing that I originally overlooked. Overall you have really good ideas about how to drastically improve this article and I'm really interested to see how you develop it even further. Let me know if you have any questions about my suggestions! Emilyrd98 (talk) 23:48, 18 March 2018 (UTC)
My Notes on Peer Review
Need to reorganize information: currently the info is organized by the topic it discusses, at the moment two of these are books, which is not an ideal way to format this.
Maybe the sections should seperate the scientific material from the theoretical material from the history from the theological and cultural impact.
I realize I have not given much attention to the method in which I will combine the current information on the article to my new information, but I have even imagined that much of the current information will get removed by me due to the Talk page's distaste towards the author's use of personal research. I like Emily's suggestion of copy and pasting the info directly into my sandbox in order to discover a cohesive format.
Prof Garcia's Comments
Week 4 @Cacrotty: excellent work here. I think you are going to really enjoy researching this topic and providing a substantial amount of useful content to the world. Keep up the great work. Be safe on your travels. Alfgarciamora (talk) 16:17, 19 February 2018 (UTC)
Week 6 ((ping|Cacrotty}} Welcome back! Now that you're back into action, I will need to see some more of the research that you are doing. Just make sure to ping me when you get around to it. Alfgarciamora (talk) 22:18, 5 March 2018 (UTC)
@Alfgarciamora: I've added this new section titled The Roman Catholic Church to tie in all of the research I am collecting on The Omega Point's role in Catholic Theology. There is more to come, but wanted to share with you this update as you requested.
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