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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 23:31, 29 November 2016 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Shannen Doherty filmography

Shannen Doherty filmography (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Aoba47 (talk) 16:54, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I believe that it meets all of the requirements for a featured list. It is comprehensive in its content, and I have styled its structure after similar featured lists. This is only my second time working on a list, and putting something up for FLC so I would greatly appreciate feedback and comments on how to improve this and improve lists in general. Thank you in advance! Aoba47 (talk) 16:54, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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  • I am not a fan of the current image - bad lighting and awkward pose. I see that it was changed due to the fact that the list and her bio had the same image. In my opinion, there is nothing wrong with having the same image in two pages (it is at least better than having a not-so good image) in fact I myself have done that in a few lists of my own.
  • "numerous motion pictures" consider film. And I think that television should come first in the sentence as her work in TV is more prolific.
  • "guest appearances on television shows as a child" - when as a child?
  • This was more of a topic sentence to refer to the minor guest-staring roles, but I don't think it is important enough for the lead so I have removed it. Let me know if that is okay. Aoba47 (talk) 04:12, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After her television debut in Father Murphy" - same as above.
  • "dramatic, western, television series" - unneeded commas and better as western drama television series.
  • "her television sitcom debut" - too specific and trivial IMO. If we talk about every first genre, it will be a long list (first comedy, drama etc).
  • "In 2016, she starred alongside" - I count four consecutive sentences beginning with "in".
  • "being viewed as inferior to those of Cathy Moriarty and Talia Shire in Raging Bull and Rocky" - too specific, better for her biography.
Support but you should also deal with Freikorp's comments. Also, if you looked at my previous nominations for my silly mistakes, you would consider yourself a master. – FrB.TG (talk) 07:33, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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Well done with the article, i'm very close to supporting. Only two things stand out to me

  • "Despite this, some felt" - should you attribute who felt this way? It's coming across a bit
    weaselish
    to me.
  • "She starred alongside Alec Baldwin, Danny Glover, and Michael Madsen in the sports drama film Back in the Day (2016)." I understand you have reworded this to satisfy the above concern about four sentence starting with "In", but now I think this sounds awkward and the styling is inconsistent (year in brackets as opposed to in prose). To satisfy the original request, I would instead suggest rewording the second sentence from "In the same year" to "Later that year".
    talk) 06:12, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply
    ]
Hi again. I didn't see anything done about the second issue - maybe your edit didn't save? I changed it myself since you thought it was a good idea also. Anyway also now the prose says "she received positive reviews" though only one source is given. I would suggest adding a second or changing the prose to a single attributed favourable comment on the show from the source given.
talk) 21:43, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply
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    Freikorp: Thank you for your comment; I must have somehow forgot to save that edit so I apologize for that. I have added an additional reviews to that part to better support it. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do. Thank you again for your help. Aoba47 (talk) 22:59, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply
    ]
Support. :)
talk) 08:23, 17 November 2016 (UTC)[reply
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Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:17, 17 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Source Review
  • Spotchecks and formatting checks passed, though note that if you're adding an archive link to a reference where the main url still works, you can add "|deadurl=no" to the reference and it will change the main link to the present url and link the archive on the word "archived" instead of linking "original". --PresN 20:31, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • @PresN: That makes sense. I always wondered about that so thank you for letting me know about it. I am trying to be better with the structure/organization of my references, and I will definitely keep that in mind for the future. Aoba47 (talk) 21:36, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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