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I've listed this article for peer review because it has seen substantial change since the last review, with a major section (focused on during the last PR) being removed and merged into a different article.
Regards,
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Review in progress --Senra (talk) 13:35, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Consider reading wikipediaAlso there are some bad links in the references.non-break spacing( ); abbreviations in conversions and other problems.
'''{{infobox UK place'''...}} Needs area so pop. dens. can be automatically calculated.Subjectively, I do not think the pair of images say anything. Consider using a better image here. Perhaps the watercolour by G. Shepherd (Shepherd, George Sidney (1784–1862) – ODNB)?
- Lead Needs work as per WP:LEADbut leave till last as content may change
Toponymy should be part of History section as perWP:CITIES.and or A Dictionary of British Place-Names. A. D. Mills. Oxford University Press, 2003?Perhaps reference Domesday Book entry
- History Lack of references, particularly at end of some paragraphs.
Consider consulting 'Parishes: Aldermaston', A History of the County of Berkshire: Volume 3 (1923), pp. 386-395. URL: http://www.british-history.ac.uk/report.aspx?compid=43231&strquery=Aldermaston Date accessed: 05 July 2010.Lists should be avoided as perWP:MoS. Convert list to prose. Consider organising similar to Chatteris (I would say similar to Little Thetfordbut then I would be accused of bias)
World War I This is an orphaned sub-section heading. In general, a section should have some sub-sections or non at all. As it stands, this history section needs no sub-sections
Church Not as perWP:CITIES. Consider Church as part of Religious sites section or Architecture section
Governance Weak. What do parish councils do? Who governs the parish councils? Who governs them? What parliamentary ward is the village in?
Demographics This sub-section is well cited. The sub-sub-sections may be an overkill. Perhaps another editor can cast an eye on this. Are there any historical population figures for the village?
Geography Well cited
Geology Needs a reference
Economy and local industries"There have been numerous farms in Aldermaston parish." needs a reference."Various sources cite ..." is woolly. Who are the various sources? Needs references.The lead of the economy section needs an historical context and needs restructuring. It first discusses 1919 then goes back to 1760's schooling. It is not clear what the main economy of the village is
Transport As a general rule, if sentences have references and then no reference for following sentences, the reader wonders if the information is accurate. Is there a reference for "...the station serves First Great Western services between Reading, Newbury and Bedwyn. The nearest stations to Aldermaston station are Midgham to the west and Theale to the east. Journey times approximate 17 minutes to either Reading or Newbury."?
Education Who established the 1830 school? State or guilds/feoffees?
Culture well referenced
Sport again, well referenced although I feel again, that The Cricket Club is the oldest sports club in the village so this section should lead with the cricket club then go on to mention RFC and AFC
Given the above; generally a good article. I enjoyed reading it. --Senra (talk) 15:24, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
- Struck done items. The version of your article before my comments was this one. I was using this version of your article to strike the above. From 78 to 120 references! Nice. Well done. Let me know on my talk page when you are finished and I will give it another look --Senra (talk) 11:32, 9 July 2010 (UTC)
As an aside, using the toolbox, dablinks found 4 wikilinks going to disambiguation pages- David Kaufman
- Henry I
- Henry IV
- Jacobean
:Checklinks found 7 problems - some dead links. Altviewer found no alt text whatsoever on any image in the article. These all need fixing ahead of
- There are still some dead references :) Other than that, most seems to have been done. I still think the economy section could be ordered by date, but it is better now than it was. I suspect the sub-sub-section heading "3.2.1 July 2007 floods" is really redundant. In any case, the auto-review in the toolbox is recommending that contents list is too long, probably due this extra deep sub-sub-section. Consider also reviewing ]