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  • Ikezawa Natsuki: I went over this quickly and gave up when I got hungry. It is nearly finished, I think. Now; I am going to get something to eat. Rintrah 10:03, 30 December 2006 (UTC);  Done Good job, Rintrah. These auto-translated articles are always rough. Gzkn 09:38, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Auto show Rintrah 06:36, 29 December 2006 (UTC);  Done, although surely there's more that could be written about the subject than just that dinky paragraph. Gzkn 13:51, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • History of Linux  Done. I think some questions about the article remain, including a need for better referencing. For example, the quote at the end of the "The name Linux" section has no reference, though I assume it's from Torvalds's book. —beverson 22:13, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Additionally, this is my first attempt knocking off an article from the proofread list; please make additional changes as necessary, and please contact me (my talk page, etc.) with any feedback. Thanks. —beverson
  • Sign here! 05:15, 17 December 2006 (UTC) | DONE! Galena11 20:10, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Death of a Paddleboat Lover Rintrah 08:32, 29 December 2006 (UTC)| It appears that this article was deleted today. Galena11 20:17, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gospel of Mary Didn't need much work by the time I got to it; made a few small changes and removed it from the backlog. —beverson 19:39, 2 January 2007 (UTC) | Done! Galena11 20:28, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • *Xavier's Security Enforcers Started X's, since Yakeen (1969 film) looked a bit daunting. :) Probably still needs clearing up from someone familiar with X-Men. I've tagged it with "cleanup-comics". Gzkn 06:24, 2 January 2007 (UTC). Random Passer-by 20:48, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Development life cycle Short, needs references. (The whole article probably needs to be expanded by someone with more expertise, but it's copy-edited.) —beverson 16:27, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Hybrid pylon: I tried my best to clean this up and organize it, but I'm no electrician so I may have missed something.Galena11 07:11, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply
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  • Conflict escalation: I tried to make it less ridiculous. Rintrah 12:36, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    • Did a followup; it's improved, but it still needs a lot of sources and changes from experts. — Deckiller 21:43, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Whitford, New Zealand: Like a Lonely Planet guide, only more random and less relevant. I wonder if the population exceeds 200. Rintrah 13:56, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    • What an odd article...tried copy-editing, but was mostly confused by the random statements there. Gzkn 12:19, 29 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      • It is indeed odd. I tried to put the random statements into a logical sequence, but could not decide what else to do with the article. I think we should just make sure it is properly copyedited, and let someone who knows something about the town write something sensible.

Rintrah 14:34, 18 December 2006 (UTC) | Well, it's improved...— Deckiller 21:51, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Sign here! 21:27, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Edea (musical group) Hi guys, thought i'd join your project; seems like a great idea. This article is the first one I had a go at; I picked an eazy one. Although the information is far from complete (I did surf the web but could find little) I did my best. Pls spam my talk page with comments and suggestions as I am totally new to this. Brisbane2000 21:27, 26 December 2006 (UTC)| Done! Did some minor changes. Galena11 22:46, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Young Modern Another "Y" article. An upcoming album. Short. Gzkn 05:30, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • W. A. Silva Short. Gzkn 07:27, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • All set, although I had to add some reference tags. — Deckiller 22:55, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sledging (cricket) : Rintrah and I worked on this one. It might be helpful for someone familiar with cricket to do the proofread, to ensure that I didn't mangle any game terminology. Galena11 17:00, 28 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I made a few touch ups. There doesn't appear to be anything wrong with the terminology. (I come from a country where cricket is popular, although I don't watch the game much). Thanks for doing what I was too tired and unwell to do. Rintrah 07:56, 29 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I did a run-though, but it still needs a lot of work. — Deckiller 22:09, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Does it need more copyediting work, or just more work to be a better article? If the latter, should we move it to "finished", because we've copyedited everything that is currently there? Galena11 22:48, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, we've done all we probably can do with it. The tone seems to have a lot of misplaced "informal British". — Deckiller 23:07, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Right, I'll move it down to "finished". Galena11 23:48, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Done. |
Talk | Sign Here 01:22, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Done. Added infobox, cleaned up non-working userbox, and wikified a tiny bit. Adam 02:36, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Reviewed, wikified, added references. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 03:04, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm working on this one but will have to come back to it later tonight.  Done Galena11 05:29, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • This article is in very bad shape - the LoCE tag on the talk page implies that the entire article was reviewed, and the section of quotes looked much better before - I will probably revert if I can figure out what changed - I've been trying to clean up, but keep finding more and more needs. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 06:17, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Good point. I've added "or a portion of it" to the LoCE tag to cover cases like this one. Gzkn 06:22, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Good idea - I did enough cleanup in there that it's no longer dismal, but I'm too tired to look at the prose. Unfortunately, all of that copyedit work just done is based on a very shaky source - I left it all, but Smoking Gun is not a reliable source. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 07:59, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Christopher Rice: American author. I added a contradiction box because it mentions that he lives in two different places--I noted this on the talk page as well. Galena11 00:49, 27 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    • Did a run-through. Not comfortable moving it down yet though. Gzkn 09:00, 29 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      • Are we waiting for the resolution of the contradiction, or is there another reason not to move it to "finished"? Galena11 23:51, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
        •  Done I revisited this one, but I couldn't remember why I wasn't comfortable moving it down. :) Anyway, the contradiction is unlikely to be resolved by us. Gzkn 05:35, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Apna Sapna Money Money --JAXHERE | Talk 15:54, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Say Yes (Elliott Smith song) Very short. Gzkn 11:44, 3 January 2007 (UTC) Random Passer-by 16:05, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • William S. Baring-Gould A Sherlock Holmes scholar! Short. Gzkn 06:11, 3 January 2007 (UTC) |  Done, no changes Galena11 20:36, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Armando Molero Did what I could, found in the "As", added ref tags, article is basically a translation from a Spanish website I found in Google. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:49, 3 January 2007 (UTC) |  Done Galena11 20:49, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ishq Hai Tumse - Short Bollywood film. Plot probably still needs some work. Gzkn 00:50, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done Adam 18:03, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • War Hawk This was a weird one. Sort of a stubby article at first, with some incomplete thoughts and weird references. Further research into the revision history yielded an older, much better version, to which I reverted. The original seems to had been lost in an unfortunate series of vandalism and incomplete revision in the past. Anyway, should be a quick proofread. —beverson 17:52, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Done (still a tad iffy). — Deckiller 04:45, 7 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Germany Getting ready for FA. Could use a different pair of eyes for the final check. Raymond Arritt 17:57, 8 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm working on this one. Galena11 22:46, 9 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Finished the copyedit and am just waiting for clarification on one piece of prose before I can call it "done." Galena11 16:58, 10 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Galena11 16:25, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've done a first, top to bottom, copy edit and I'll go back and do some more work (my) tomorrow but, at this stage, this article almost certainly needs a second pair of eyes. Random Passer-by 02:06, 4 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've now gone through the whole article for a second time and I'm done. Proofread at will. Random Passer-by 14:35, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Galena11 20:39, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ali Shir Nava'i First of the New Year. Happy New Year everyone! Gzkn 09:17, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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 Done Galena11 21:10, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Galena11 05:28, 12 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Gzkn 14:26, 13 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Rintrah 02:42, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
it's  Done Rintrah 07:18, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Good job.  Done Rintrah 08:28, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Galena11 06:15, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Galena11 16:48, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done –Outriggr § 05:40, 20 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Rintrah 04:25, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
It would be great if copy-editing this article was given a high priority. The feedback from the FAC has been positive with one exception. One reviewer has given support with reservations for the article due to prose issues. I don't think they are major, if someone here could copy-edit the article and post something at the FAC page
talk 03:25, 12 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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I'll get to this later today. Gzkn 03:48, 12 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Forgot to move this down after my copy-edit. It was promoted on January 20! Woot. Gzkn 05:59, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Slayer: On a band, Currently trying to get to FA status, the thing that's stopping is that it contains choppy sentences, with no flow in places, especially the Christ illusion section. Any help will be greatly appreciated M3tal H3ad 01:06, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • I had a quick look and made a quick edit. You're right: the prose is well below FA standard. The praising tone and disjointed sentences work against the required formality. Rintrah 04:23, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • But it's worth working on the prose, because it's well-referenced and the rest of the article structure is in place, ready for FAC. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 06:39, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
        • I've done all i can with it regarding copy-editing. M3tal H3ad 04:00, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
          • Also promoted on January 20. Gzkn 06:04, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sign here! 05:35, 7 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Thank you so much! So iit's finshed now? --♥
    Tohru Honda13♥ 04:44, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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I welcome a second opinion, maybe I'm being too modest. --BrokenSphere 05:02, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, I agree. A second opinion would be more assuring. --♥
Tohru Honda13♥ 07:02, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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Rintrah has proofread it. --♥
Tohru Honda13♥ 07:34, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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 Done Last proofread by Rintrah. ♥

Tohru Honda13♥ 07:34, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Punk rock has been nominated for FAR. I've mostly been adding content, and would appreciate some help with the prose. Thanks. + Ceoil 08:33, 12 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I looked this article over and only found one or two very minor errors. This article is really good and does not seem to need a copy edit--Puddytang 06:31, 17 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 DonePunk rock passed
WP:FAR. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 14:19, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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Moved down...Tohru Honda13: your signature is reeeaaally long in wikicode :-p Gzkn 09:05, 23 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done The backlog doesn't seem to have many cultured articles. Rintrah 17:19, 23 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unterseeboot 35: A translation from German about a U-boat used in WWI. I did my best with it, but someone fluent in German may want to check the original text to ensure I didn't lose any meaning. Fairly short. Galena11 23:43, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Looks good now. --BrokenSphere 05:02, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Some of the categories were incorrect. It was categorized as a World War II submarine, and launched/sunk in the 30's. I don't think the Type is a VII (those appear to be 30's U-boats), but I left it in as it's not something I'm an expert on. - Itsfullofstars 05:41, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • Now I feel silly for not noticing that. There were 2 U-35s, each of which served in a world war, so I've added the uboat.net page for the WW I subject of the article and removed it from the Type VII category, as those were strictly WW II boats. However since there is only one U-35 article, I think a disambiguation page is in order to point out that there were 2 separate U-boats given the same number. --BrokenSphere 06:18, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I finished the copyedit. Hope you're feeling better, Rintrah! Galena11 20:16, 28 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Only one thing missed, I think this article is done. --Sigma 7 03:45, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I fixed a few more small details. Rintrah 04:22, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Come on. You know you want to proofread this. Rintrah 17:21, 23 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Tough article to do, but I guess it's  Done — Deckiller 03:31, 24 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weyerhaeuser: Did not require a lot of work, but the Corporate history section is still a little choppy. Also, the Corporate governance section seems redundant as all of the information in it is also in the Weyerhaeuser template directly below it. Grhs126studenttalk 21:01, 26 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done — Deckiller 20:51, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • NOTICE — the copyediting was completely reverted by a user locked in an edit war with another user. — Deckiller 04:00, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Anti-pattern: I couldn't find any errors in this article. Puddytang 02:28, 19 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • are you kidding me? Fixed it. all done.--Rocketrye12 01:09, 21 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I copyedited it more. If I have made any mistakes, please fix or revert them. Rintrah 16:18, 23 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • BuddingJournalist 05:19, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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  • Aziz Abdul Naji: It's mainly the tone that needs work; it's about a Gitmo detainee and I'm not supremely knowledgeble in the cases and decisions surrounding it. The tone is clearly against the Bush policies surrounding the issue, and it need someone who can change the tone without changing the meaning. Many thanks to anyone who helps. Defenestrating Monday 23:09, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I made some major changes. Let me know what you think.--Rocketrye12 01:25, 21 January 2007 (UTC), and if we can get rid of the 'needs copy editing status'[reply]
  •  Done Looks well-written to me. I made one minor change. The article does seem to focus too heavily on Guantanamo rather than on Mr. Naji though.
    BuddingJournalist 08:08, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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 Done — ♥

Tohru Honda13♥ 01:10, 30 January 2007 (UTC)[reply
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