Talk:Cedar Rock State Park

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I appreciate the excellent edits done by McGhiever on February 25. However, I find that I don't like the new lead sentence. It changes the emphasis of the article to being about the state park rather than the Lowell Walter Residence that Frank Lloyd Wright nicknamed Cedar Rock. Granted, it is a state park, which I gather is an interest of McGhiever's, but in this case that's simply the legal situation rather than what is noteworthy. The previous wording took into account both the noteworthy building and its official status as a park of the State of Iowa. I won't revert the edit because it included numerous other valuable additions. Thoughts?
--Frankie Rae (talk) 02:46, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I just combined the first two sentences, so hopefully more of the salient bits feel included in the opening line. Anyone is welcome to fine-tune the wording, and I will happily participate in building consensus here on the talk page.

talk) 05:04, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply

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That works. Thanks, McGhiever!

--Frankie Rae (talk) 15:00, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]