Talk:Cup of the Ptolemies

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GA Review

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talk · contribs) 01:31, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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talk) 01:31, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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talk) 02:22, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (
    lists
    )
    :
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (
    reliable sources): c (OR
    ):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (
    focused
    )
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  4. It follows the
    neutral point of view
    policy
    .
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have
    suitable captions
    )
    :
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lede

  • The photographs of the front and back of the cup are licensed CC BY-SA 3.0 and are therefore free to use in this article.
  • I suggest using the multiple image template for the images of the front and rear of the cup.
    Excellent idea!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Front (top) and back (bottom) of the cup.
  • In the first sentence, should the French name for the cup be written as either (French: Coupe des Ptolémées) or (French: Coupe des Ptolémées)?
    I went with the latter, since it's both the title (and thus needs to be capitalized) and French (and therefore should be italicized on the English Wiki).--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section, the lede of this article adequately defines the topic, establishes the necessary context, and explains why the cup is notable and historically relevant.
  • The lede is well-written, consists of content that is adequately sourced and verifiable, and I have no other comments or questions for this section.

History

  • Cameo is mentioned and wiki-linked in the lede, but not used as a descriptor of the carving in the history. Could it be listed in both descriptions for consistency's sake?
    Sure thing.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per Wikipedia:Inline citation, the inline citations should be consolidated and listed in numerical order at the end of sentences. This does not include the footnote citations.
    Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there a descriptor for Jean Tristan de Saint-Amant to introduce his relevance to make an assertion regarding the cup's original intention? Was he a historian, an antiquarian, a scholar? I'm also assuming Babelon was a historian, too. I suggest rewriting as "description by historian Jean Tristan de Saint-Amant" or "Historian... Scholar E. Babelon argued that the cup..." Where possible, it may read better if the person's profession is mentioned in the sentence. Let me know what you think; this is merely a suggestion.
    I like the suggestion, and it has been implemented.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm assuming the sources aren't clear on which of the French monarchs donated the cup to St. Denis?
    There's quite a bit of debate on that, and that's the reason why I made Note 3.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    My apologies for leaving this comment in the review; I should have struck this when I read the footnotes below. Looks good! --
    talk) 13:54, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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  • 1,200 should be written as 1,200 livres.
    Opps, good catch.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • De-link the second mention of Basilica of Saint-Denis
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • This section is well-written, consists of content that is adequately sourced and verifiable, and I have no other comments or questions for this section.
  • talk) 14:22, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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Comments

I didn't think the article was very well-written, frankly, but I have given it a quick copyedit (adressing some points above I see). The description of the cup and its carvings is pretty inadequate for a GA, I would have thought, & the history takes up the great bulk of the article. Do we know its weight? I never know what the GA standard actually is though, so don't mind me. Johnbod (talk) 04:40, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I always appreciate a good copy-edit. Sadly, I've added all the source I could find about this object to the article. I'm sure many, many more exist, but I think that they are in either French or Italian, and I do not have access to them at the moment.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
OK, I found a good source that was in French (heh, it was already in-use in the article), and I spent a bit of time translating it. I've added quite a bit, even going so far as to create a new section called "Description". Here's what I've done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 07:17, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
talk) 13:58, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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I can fix that.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:44, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
talk) 14:00, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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I found a few more good sources, so I added them. How does this look? I also removed the description of the cup because, while written well, it really veered pretty close to original research.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:53, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You're joking! Whatever. Nothing from 1891 is a "good source". The article has a big problem in not having any sources with substantive coverage that are less than 100 years old. Johnbod (talk) 22:02, 1 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
talk) 01:26, 2 February 2015 (UTC)[reply
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Thank you! As for the date issues, yeah, that's true, but nothing more recent has emerged. To be fair, many of the old, old articles are secondary sources discussing the history and the Latin inscription (facets of history that are fairly uncontroversial and probably not likely to change any time soon). The golden age of philology, art history, and the classics was in the 1890s, so it only makes sense that a huge amount of sources would be from that time period. With that being said, I'll keep my eye out for any newer and larger source that can take the place of some of the older bits in this article.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:29, 2 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]