Talk:Danganronpa: Unlimited Battle

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Unlimited Battle! ..."ceased operations in November 2015..." Cognissonance (talk) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • "similarly to billiards" — Fix grammar: "as with billiards".
  •  Done
  • "confined arena area" — Coincide with Gameplay: "confined arena-like area".
  •  Done
  • "one noted that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series, however," — Improve flow: "one noted however that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series".
  •  Done

Gameplay

  • Remove a repeated
    billiards
     link.
  •  Done
  • "in a billiards-like fashion" — Minimize repetition: "like billiards".
  •  Done
  • "After a certain number of turns had passed" — Minimize repetition: "With a certain number of turns passed".
  •  Done
  • "As the player defeated enemies, the enemies would drop two types of items" — Simplify: "Defeated enemies would drop two types of items".
  •  Done
  • "of the player's character" — Simplify: "of the player character".
  • Well, "player character" makes it sound like it's the player's avatar or whatever - the character representing them, or the character they control - which doesn't seem to be the case with the characters in DR:UB. Anyway, changed it to "their characters".

Release and reception

  • The section should be written in past tense.
  •  Done
  • "found the game fun and requiring skill and strategy" — Clarify: "found the game fun, requiring skill and strategy".
  •  Done
  • "why Spike Chunsoft would chose a game known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" as a game for a touchscreen action game" — Fix grammar and clarify: "why Spike Chunsoft would choose a series known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" to make a touchscreen action game".
  •  Done, but I went with "as the base for" rather than "to make".
  • Write the prefixes A at B with variation.
  •  Done

Overall

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (
    lists
    )    :
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (
    reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism
    ):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall: Ping me when you're done / have questions.
    Pass/Fail:
    @
    IDV: Cognissonance (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2016 (UTC)[reply
    ]
    @
    talk 15:24, 28 October 2016 (UTC)[reply
    ]
  8. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (
    lists
    )    :
    Pass/Fail:
    @
    IDV: Good stuff. Cognissonance (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)[reply
    ]
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